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When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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It is thought by some that when you meet a human it is possible to realise the type of
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 they are and whether we like or dislike them. I believe
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 is probably a bad thing and I will explain the reasons in the ensuing paragraphs. The first reason for my view is that when you meet
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 for the first time it is possible to have a wrong idea of how the
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 is.
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,
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 might seem reliable, and honest but they could be completely the opposite.
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, judging
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 and believing they are not a good
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, individuals might miss the chance to meet amazing
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. Another reason for my perspective is that it is good to see
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 more than once to get an idea of what kind of
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 they are, and once you start having conversations and spending time, you can start to determine if they are
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 that you would like that be friends with.
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, it is good to get the chance to know
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 before judging.
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,
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 essay has described why it is a bad idea to judge
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 you do not know well. The world is full of great humans and it would be a shame to lose having those great
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 in our lives just because of thinking negative things before really knowing them.
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logical structure
Ensure paragraphs are linked with clear signposting language. Although transitions are present, using words like 'Firstly, Additionally, In conclusion' more explicitly could improve flow.
introduction conclusion present
The essay effectively introduces the topic and concludes with a summarizing statement, demonstrating an understanding of how to structure an essay.
supported main points
Main points are supported with logical reasoning, providing a clear perspective on the topic.
complete response
The essay gives a complete response to the prompt, addressing both positive and negative aspects of judging people quickly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • initial judgment
  • stereotypes
  • assess
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • appearance
  • facade
  • misjudgments
  • unfair judgments
  • decision-making process
  • social situation
  • character
  • repeated interactions
  • open-mindedness
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