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Band 5.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Two juxtaposed images describe the current version of Southwest
Airport
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 and some changes after the improvements. At first glance, the
airport
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 will be broadened and new facilities will be added to boost the passengers' satisfaction. In detail, currently, the part of the
airport
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 that handles departures contains a check-in room and a cafe, but it is planned to add a space for bag drop.
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, the locations of check-in and cafe will be changed and one more door will be built in the departure area. When it comes to arrivals, the space is quite empty at the moment. So, in the following years, there will be facilities
such
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 as a new cafe, ATM, and car hire.
Similarly
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, the number of doors
also
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 will be increased.
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, there will be an improvement in the total number of gates. Currently, the
airport
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 contains 8 gates, but it will be raised to 18 in the future. Another important development is expected to be in the walkway which is projected to be replaced with a new sky train.
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, the
airport
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 will host shops for the customers that come from the departure section.

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Consider including an introduction and a conclusion to frame your response and improve cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the information presented is logically structured and progresses naturally.
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Provide more comparisons and highlight how the changes will impact the airport's functionality.
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Double-check smaller details to ensure complete accuracy in the description.
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The essay clearly identifies and compares key changes to the airport.
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Good development of ideas with appropriate use of examples from the diagrams.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure maintained while describing the current layout and future plans.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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