you recently saw some students behaving in a way that could be dangerous near the road outside their college you think the college should do something about this write a letter to the head of the college in your letter give details of what you saw and explain why you think this could be dangerous and suggest what the college should do about this
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
message finds you well. I am writing to express my concern regarding a potentially hazardous situation I recently observed near the road outside Oyemekun Grammar School Akure. It involves students
engaging in risky behaviour that could lead to severe accidents. On several occasions, I have witnessed groups of students
casually crossing the busy road without paying attention to oncoming traffic. Some were seen using mobile phones or headphones, significantly distracted by their surroundings. This
behaviour is particularly alarming given the high volume of vehicles passing during peak hours. The lack of awareness and caution poses a significant danger not only to themselves but also
to drivers who may not anticipate sudden pedestrian movements. An unfortunate incident could occur if this
is not addressed promptly. I would like to suggest that the school implements measures to improve safety. Organising road safety workshops or seminars could educate students
about the importance of being vigilant near traffic. Additionally
, appointing staff members to supervise the area during busy times and encouraging the use of designated pedestrian crossings could further
enhance safety. Thank you for considering this
important matter. I trust that the school will take the necessary steps to ensure the well-being of its students
. Yours sincerely, HenrySubmitted by henikeassociates on
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task achievement
Further detail on the exact nature of the students' actions could be provided for clarity.
task achievement
Consider including an example or statistic about road accidents involving pedestrians to strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses more closely on a single supporting point, though this is generally well-managed.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is clear and logical, with a good introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Appropriate greetings and closing are used in the letter format.
task achievement
The writing tone is very polite and formal, suitable for addressing a head of college.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.