Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The extinction of animal species is an important issue nowadays. Environmentalists argue that countries and individuals must take responsibility for saving these
animals
, while
others say that the problems
of human beings
are more important. This
essay will discuss both views and provide evidence as to why we must care about the environment and its endangered inhabitants.
On the one
hand, there is an argument that we should concentrate on human beings
' difficulties. There are so many issues concerning people
living on this
earth, such
as wars, hunger, diseases, and other life-threatening situations. So, it is wise to spend our limited resources on alleviating suffering people
from these problems
, rather than on wildlife. For instance
, with the huge amount of money that is
being spent annually on keeping pandas safe, we can save millions of hungry children in Africa. Furthermore
, individuals have emotions and sensations which make it harder to see them suffer. In short, people
's empathy for one
another encourages them to prioritize each other's needs.
On the other hand
, some people
are concerned about the environment and endangered animals
and argue that we are responsible for their lives because this
is the result of our actions and manipulations of their habitats. Moreover
, animals
and human beings
are all parts of one
ecosystem, and, according to
the Butterfly Effect, the collapsing of one
part will paralyze the other parts. For example
, if ants become extinct, so will our farming industry, which will result in famine and hunger. In short, although
animals
are not directly involved in our lives, I believe that ignoring them will lead to more serious problems
.
In conclusion, the lives and problems
of all living beings
are valuable and require consideration. In my opinion, we cannot be indifferent to other living creatures, since this
ignorance will have disastrous impacts on our own being.Submitted by za.nazmi on
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