The graph below shows the number of library books read by bos and girls at Starmourth School from 2006 to the present.
The given chart provide us with data about how many Starmourth School's
books
were read by males
and females between 2006 and 2012.
Looking at an overall
structure it is readily apparent that both categories experienced a rise within the given timeframe. Girls
were dominating over boys
in the initial period, however
they reversed their positions with Add a comma
however,
boys
in the ultimate period.
Although
the amount of books
read by girls
accounted for approximately 52 in 2009 and this
figure nearly doubled at around 100 in 2011, by 2012 the number had dropped to only 80 books
.
The opposite was true for boys
in the initial years. They showed lower interest in reading in comparison with girls
both in 2009 and 2010, they read 20 and 40 books
respectively. However
during the period from 2010 to 2011, books
read by boys
underwent a significant increase and catched the number of books
read by girls
- 100. By 2012, boys
had taken the lead, reading 140 books
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