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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Almost all people would prefer reading newspapers and
books
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 online rather than buying them in the near future,
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, without paying.
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 essay agrees that it would have fewer negative consequences and make lives easier.
Firstly
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, people would suffer less from illnesses caused by lifting heavy papers;
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, compactness and versatility will lead to less effort and more concentration
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, doctors always recommend avoiding lifting heavy materials during everyday life. More and more schools and universities are being digitalized day to day,
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, thousands of tablets are already provided and being used
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 of heavy
books
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, students of my high school come only with a couple of
books
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 which are essential to be taken and laptops or tablets because they are away from home for a whole day, so, all they need are in their bags which are light at the same time. Technologies save time, energy and even money providing compactness and versatility. More useful functions are provided by technologies and all in one rule works great there. Obviously, parents would buy only a gadget
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 of spending money to buy expensive
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,
also
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, a person who works on several tasks simultaneously may have confusion and fear when looking to many papers or searching needed encyclopedia.
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, when I was in the office of my uncle whose occupation is programmer I paid attention to the lack of papers and all the workers were focused on writing programs because all the things that they needed were in their gadgets. In conclusion, reading
books
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 and newspapers online would be preferable, since it would diminish health diseases and would provide a pure mind which makes relaxing or working time more enjoyable.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clarity by refining transitional phrases. Phrases like "Technologies save time" should be contextualized for readers unfamiliar with the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Avoid overly complex sentences that may confuse readers. Break them into shorter, clear ones.
Task Achievement
Consider presenting a counter-argument to demonstrate a more balanced view, addressing possible issues with digital reading.
Task Achievement
Great use of specific examples, such as the transition to digital tools in education, enhances the persuasive element of the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure includes an effective introduction and conclusion, making the essay easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical flow of ideas with each paragraph building on the previous one, leading to a strong and reinforcing argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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