In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Domestic migration from remote villages to modern towns and sprawling mega-cities
constitute
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a dominant trend in the twenty-first century.
As a result
, residents of rural areas are declining
while
those of urban regions are climbing. I wholeheartedly consider
this
to be a
drwaback
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drawback
owing to several malicious ramifications encompassing
reduction
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in agricultural products
as well as
public services. On the one hand, a mass migration to the suburbs results in declining agricultural activity and a downward trajectory in food production. If more and more people leave
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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, there will be
less
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fewer
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and
less
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vital foods
such
as milk available in
the
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supermarkets,
for example
.
Furthermore
, dairy products are rich in protein,
fiber
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, vitamins and minerals
such
as calcium. If our bodies receive an insufficient amount of them
as a result
of diminished agricultural activity it can possibly lead to a fall in the public well-being in terms of health.
On the other hand
,
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less populated rural habitats means that fewer essential public service professions will be available for the remaining citizens living there. If people leave villages in extraordinary numbers
then
there will be inadequate numbers of doctors and teachers to concentrate on the local residents,
for instance
.
Moreover
, the lack of sufficient public service careers not only can result in maltreatment of
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vulnerable patients but
also
can lead to rampant illiteracy.
Therefore
, we can anticipate to observe higher death levels of the ill and
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more isolated and illiterate rural citizens. In conclusion, I unequivocally consider the widespread domestic migration to cities as a tremendous pitfall and an unfortunate development that brings about immense repercussions.
Nevertheless
,
disdvantages
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disadvantages
can be numerous but shrinking levels of essential foods and dwindling numbers of available public service jobs in the
coutryside
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countryside
constitute two considerable consequences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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