You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre. You want to find out more about these lessons. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In the letter ● describe how well you can swim at the moment ● explain why you want to learn to swim better ● enquire about the time and cost of the swimming lessons

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Dear Sir, I hope

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letter finds you well. I am writing

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letter in context to the swimming classes provided in

community

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sports centre. I am a resident of Ward 16 and I am interested in learning swimming because I am a

beginners

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and I barely can swim to a few metres only. I want to learn

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sport,because it

facinates

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fascinates

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me from childhood. I wanted to learn it, but I could not manage to do so as I was not able to find any teacher. My aim behind learning is to compete at higher levels and push

my self

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physically and mentally. It would be great of you if you could tell me about a few things.

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, the schedule of classes,

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would help me to spare time for the lessons.

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cost

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the cost

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of the course,

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would help me to manage

finances

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my finances

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. I hope you will write

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and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single point clearly to enhance coherence. For example, separate the personal motivation from the logistics enquiry.

coherence cohesion

You might want to give a brief closing remark or expression of anticipation for the response, to round off the letter.

coherence cohesion

The letter is structured with a clear introduction, body, and closing, making it easy for the reader to follow.

task achievement

The task response is complete, addressing the ability to swim, reasons for learning, and enquiring about lesson details.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is appropriate and polite for a formal enquiry.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

166 words

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