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The diagram below displays the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below displays the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 diagram provides us with the life cycle of a
ladybird
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as well as
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 the anatomy of the ladybug.
Firstly
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, the lifecycle of the
ladybird
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consist
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 of four main stages:egg,larva,pupa and adult.Here is a summary of the key information given to us.The egg
stage
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 begins with a female
ladybird
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 laying eggs on the leaf as
this
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stage
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 lasts for
approximatly
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approximately
 2 to 5 days.
Larva
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The Larva
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stage
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 which
the
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 second one
aftre
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after
 hatching will remain for about 21 days
then
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 we will have the Pupa
were
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where
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 the larva lasts for 7 days and
finally
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 the adult
stage
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were
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where
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pupa
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the pupa
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 transforms into an adult
ladybird
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 completing the life cycle. After
that
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that,
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 we will see
tha
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the
 anatomy of a ladybug starting with the head equipped with the antennae and eyes which help the insect navigate
his
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its
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enviroment
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environment
.
Next,
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pronotum
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 is a sheild-like
structured
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 located behind the head
then
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 you will see the Elytra these are the hard , red protective wings.
at
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last
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 the legs
nd
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and
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 as a fact a
ladybird
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 has six legs aiding in moving.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ladybird, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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