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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.
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The provided line graph gives data on four states of residence of international
students
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 in
Australia
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. It is measured in thousands of
students
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. In brief, it is evident that the
number
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 of international
students
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 from given countries getting an education in
Australia
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 was showing moderate and steady growth throughout the whole 18-year period. As shown on the graph, the
number
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 of
students
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 from Indonesia, Hong Kong and Singapore studying in
Australia
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 in 1982
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 0, compared to Malaysia, the
number
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 of which was already around 5000.
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, by the year 2000,
this
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number
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 showed a growth and increased to around 18.000
students
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. When it comes to Indonesia, the
number
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 of
students
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 coming from
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 state showed the most significant growth in comparison to the other 3 countries
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 and grown to approximately 22.000 by 2000.
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 from Singapore and Hong Kong educating in
Australia
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 in 2000 was around 20.000 and 18.000 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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