IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .........

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Jason, I am writing to discuss a potential adjustment to my working hours. I am keen to pursue part-time studies to enhance my skills, and I believe
this
Linking Words
 would ultimately be beneficial for our team. Specifically, I would like to reduce my weekly hours to focus on a program in Digital Media, which aligns closely with my current role. Ideally, I’d prefer to work from 9 A.m. to 3 p.m. on weekdays, allowing me to attend classes in the evening. I am committed to ensuring
this
Linking Words
 change won’t disrupt our team’s productivity; I will make certain my responsibilities are fulfilled and remain available for any urgent needs. By advancing my knowledge, particularly in marketing strategies, I’ll be better equipped to contribute to our projects and enhance our team’s outcomes. Thank you for considering my request, and I’m happy to discuss
this
Linking Words
further
Linking Words
 at your convenience. Kind regards, Sidaqpreet Kaur

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter is clear and focused on the main points of the task. You effectively explained your reasons for reducing working hours, specified your preferred schedule, and highlighted the benefits to your employer. Try to enhance the connection between different parts of your argument for an even smoother flow.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is professional and polite, which is appropriate for this context. Continue to maintain this writing tone in professional communications.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear introduction and conclusion, with well-defined paragraphs for each main point. Your ideas are well-organized and easy to follow.
Task Achievement
You explained the benefits of your studies to the employer, which demonstrates a strong understanding of task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate for a formal letter. They provide a clear and respectful boundary to your communication.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: