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Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others believe it does not help shoppers much. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Several individuals believe that it is easier to do shopping today thanks to modern technology
however
 others believe that it does not help
shoppers
 much. In
this
 essay, I shall
disscuss
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discuss
 both sides in more detail before giving my opinion. On the one hand, the evolution of technology has made more easiness for
shopping
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shop
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 through the
internet
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Internet
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 for several reasons.
Firstly
, online shopping provides a
conveniance
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convenience
 for customers who can purchase items from the comfort of their own homes or
work places
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workplaces
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.
Secondly
, it is easy to cancel the transactions.
Finally
, the retailers can sell the products with
a
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an
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 attractive discount because elimination of maintenance and real-estate
cost
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costs
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that
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which
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incourages
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encourages
encourage
 more and more customers
do
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to go
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 shopping.
On the other hand
, the evolution of technology has disadvantages for
shoppers
such
 as unfair
competitions
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competition
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, customers only
see
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seeing
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 products through electronic images.
Therefore
, some breaklaws have exploited
this
 to sell fake products with lower prices that seriously
negative
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negatively
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 affect
on
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apply
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true
shoppers
'
reputation
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reputations
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. One of
other
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the other
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backdraws
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drawbacks
 is
prauds
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that
 in online shopping,
the
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apply
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cyber crimes have been increasing and
shoppers
' information is
sometime
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sometimes
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 misused which
raise
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raises
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 private issues.
Inconclusion
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In conclusion
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, in
this
 essay, I think that
although
 technological development is sometimes adverse to
shoppers
, it plays an important role
for
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in
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 making shopping today
easer
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easier
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.
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You have addressed both views on the topic.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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