In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?
Cash
will no longer be available as a payment method in the near future while
shopping. People
have to pay using their Visa ,Mastercard or mobile. In my opinion, society
will be cashless soon and hacking is the main reason for people
may not be happy to leave their cash
use
.
For rapid technological advancement, very soon most of the society
will be a cashless society
. People
will no longer carry cash
or use
cash
in their daily life expenses. As a result
, people
will be dependent on cards
and phone payments. For example
, nowadays in Canada, almost 90% of shops, restaurants, businesses and other payments are made by cards
. Visa and Master Cards
are very popular in this
country and the government is trying to remove cash
from society
for their own purpose.
Although
there are a lot of benefits to using cards
and phones as a payment method, a few people
will not be happy with this
change. Most of the old people
in third-world countries like Bangladesh do not believe in this
technology because of hacking. As Bangladesh is not that advanced in technology so often people
lose their money by hacking. For example
, in 2015, the Bangladesh central bank got hacked, and as a result
, they lost more than 700 million dollars. Which is why a few people
do not trust this
system.
In conclusion, although
a lot of people
might be unhappy when cash
is no longer available to use
, I think this
change will come soon. As a result
, people
will not be able to use
their cash
in shopping and purchasing. As an alternative, they have to use
their credit or debit cards
or phones.Submitted by haidher301 on
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You provide a real-life example of how a bank was hacked in Bangladesh, which strengthens your argument about the distrust of cashless systems.
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