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A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, 1)Thank him/her for the invitation. 2)Explain why you cannot come. 3) Ask him/her about other times to visit.

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Dear Herin, I am happy to hear about
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 letter
by
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 your side. It had been
long
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 time
we
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since we
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 didn't meet
due to
long
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 distance. Sadly,
i
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 hope that day arrives soon .
Also
, I am so excited about
this
 message from you for our meeting.
Since
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,
long
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 duration I
had
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 been very busy regarding my job work . It's so frustrating for me to handle my social life and professional together. That's not all, but recently because of
this
schedule
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 I
am
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 badly living my unhealthy life with no proper meals and sleep . Not only
this
 but recently I got admitted just for those reasons. So doctors suggested
me
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for
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a leave from
this
 schedule. So,
currently
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 I am on my rest. so I think I
couldn't
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 make any meeting promises for now.
However
, I know you are my true friend and you would understand my situation for now . So I think we can make a better plan to meet for the next time.
Also
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their
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 is a long weekend going to come. At that time, I feel best to
plan
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 get together for some days. I hope you understand my concerns and health
issue
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. On
the
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top of that, I know
this
 would never affect our strong bond. So, feel free to contact me for any other
plannings
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 ahead. Thank you, Drashti chotaliya
Submitted by drashtichotaliya12 on

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coherence cohesion
Try to maintain clarity and avoid repetition to enhance the logical structure of your letter. Condense overlapping ideas.
coherence cohesion
Organize paragraphs around single ideas for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a warm greeting and a proper closing, maintaining a friendly tone.
task achievement
Your response adequately meets the task requirements by thanking your friend, explaining your situation, and suggesting future plans.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriately friendly, matching the context of writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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