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The table below shows the household composition in a North American country from 1970 and 2003.

The table below shows the household composition in a North American country from 1970 and 2003.
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The provided table gives information about the mix of households in a North American country over a
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 year period between 1970 and 2003.
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, it is obviously seen that the analyzed period
type
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 of family households, except married couple was
slight
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 increase,
while
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type
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the type
a type
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 of non-family
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household
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households
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 rose dramatically. Getting back to the details beginning of the year the lowest percentages from
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type
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the type
a type
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 of family
household
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 were father with kid and mother with kid. The figure accounted
9
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% and 10% respectively. A slightly bigger percentage had other
member
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members
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 sharing.
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, married
couple
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couples
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was
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had
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 the highest percentage,
made
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 up
three fifths
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 per cent, but end of the year the indicator dropped significantly and peaked at 41%,
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, the
another
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other
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type
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 of family
household
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 had negligible upward trends.
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, by 1970 the percentages of single and room sharing of
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household
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households
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 were almost low,
constituted
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constituting
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 only 7% collectively, by 2003
this
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 figure had increased dramatically, with all of them growing four times larger than they were in 1970.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words type, household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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