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In the age of digital communication and social media,face-to-face interactions are becoming less common.Some people think that this is decreasing people's ability to communicate well in person. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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technology, in-person interaction has
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 rare. Many
individuals
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 claim that it has a devastating effect on
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's interpersonal
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 to communicate effectively, though I mostly disagree with
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 statement. Admittedly, there is an improvement in digital chatting applications which reduce physical conversation.
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 means that the major components of
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tone of voice, and body language might disappear in means of digital
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, in turn, reduces
people
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's interpersonal skills in order to talk sufficiently in person.
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, instant messaging apps have their own texting styles, since it might lead to misunderstanding among
people
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.
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,
individuals
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 are not able to express their own feelings or views toward one another, and
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; it has a profound impact on their discussion in matters.
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, digital
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 platforms offer opportunities to converse without any obstacles. When
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 live in remote areas, they cannot communicate face-to-face
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 geological location.
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, it has a positive impact on the connection among them. Another obvious reason is that if
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 tend to meet in person, they need to accommodate the place, which is not a problem in social media. As
people
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 have their own internet, they can use these gadgets wherever they want. As an example, at the office, you can use these types of applications in order to communicate with your peers without booking
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 room. In conclusion,
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 the rise of digital
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 can mitigate the effectiveness of
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, I am of the opinion that it provides convenient and instant connections.

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coherence cohesion

Your essay introduces and concludes the argument effectively, providing a clear point of view.

coherence cohesion

Logical structure is well-maintained, with each argument presented in a clear and logical fashion.

task achievement

You address the task prompt adequately and provide a balanced discussion on both sides of the issue.

Improvement Suggestions

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task achievement

To improve task response, provide more relevant specific examples to support your points. This can help strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. While your overall structure is good, enhancing paragraph linkages can improve coherence further.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital communication
  • social media
  • face-to-face interactions
  • non-verbal cues
  • emotional intelligence
  • active listening
  • body language
  • facial expressions
  • tone of voice
  • nuanced communication
  • empathy
  • emotional responses
  • geographical barriers
  • misunderstandings
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