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The table below gives information about the marriages in Australia between 1960 and 2000.

The table below gives information about the marriages in Australia between 1960 and 2000.
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The table illustrates the number of religious and civil
marriages
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 in Australia in the years 1960 and 2000,
as well as
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 the average
age
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 of brides and grooms.
Overall
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,
while
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 religious
marriages
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 experienced a significant drop over the period, civil
marriages
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 showed a quick growth.
Menawhile
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Meanwhile
, the average
age
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 which both men and women
were
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steadily increased. The two types of
marriages
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 exhibited differing patterns of change. In 1960, religious
marriages
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 stood at 12,000 which was higher than civil ones to a mere 8,000. Both types of
marriages
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 grew to 46.000 and 11.000, respectively in 1970,
continued
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and continued
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 to show a moderate increase after a decade. Meanwhile,
while
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 the number of religious
marriages
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 fell to 2,000, civil
marriages
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 went up to 28,000. In 2000, civil ones increased sharply and religious
marriages
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 witnessed a growth to 36,000.
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, regarding the
age
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 of
marriages
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, in 1960 the average
age
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 of brides and grooms was 21 and 23, respectively.
Thereafter
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, both
age
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 groups went up by 2 years until 1980.
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However
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 after a 10-year period,
while
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fthe
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the
 average
age
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 of females grew to 28 and continued to double by 2 years until 2000, the marriage
age
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 of males
also
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 showed growth to 29. In 2000, men's average
age
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 increased consistently by a year, finishing at 31.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words marriages, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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