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Band 1.5

The given picture shows the process of making electricity from coal.

The given process demonstrated how to manufacture electricity from coal
element
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elements
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 in different stages.
Overall
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,
process
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the process
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 consists of nine
several
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apply
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stages which started
on
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at
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Mine
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the Mine
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place
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Place
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 to deliver houses and buildings of industry. Turning to detail,
process
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the process
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 commences
from
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with
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the firts
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firts
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first
 material coal which
extracted
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is extracted
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 mine. After, fossil fuels
conducted
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are conducted
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 to the crusher part which
transmitted
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is transmitted
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 to the trunk transport system. Next thing, the
resulted
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resulting
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 powder is transported to
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a gassifier
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gassifier
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gasifier
 where heated to produce a
gas
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.
Following
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this
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, cooled
gas
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 from
factory
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the factory
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 by removing unwanted heat before being cleaned. During
this
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 time, the purified
gas
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 is
then
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 sent to a
gas
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to
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for
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 electricity. The finalist step,
this
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 electricity can
sent
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be sent
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 like
satellite
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a satellite
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 to houses and industrial buildings.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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