You are going on holiday and have just remembered that your aunt lives in one of the cities you will be visiting. Write a letter to your aunt. In your letter: Tell her about your holiday plans Ask if you can stay with her for a portion of the trip Explain how you will make it up to her You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Aunt Sally,

Dear Aunt Sally, I am writing to tell you about my trip. I am going to visit your city from April 23 to 27.
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, I am planning to go to the mountain, the beach, and so on.
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, I would like to meet you during my trip.
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, I am free on April 24 only, because I have to work and meet someone. To be honest, I do not have much money to book the hotel.
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why it would be very helpful
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if you could let me stay at your house. And I need a parking space, because I am visiting there in my car. I would make it up to you, so please let me cook for you.
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, I am working at a restaurant, so I am good at cooking. And
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I would take your dogs for a walk. Someday, I would like you to come to my house. I would appreciate it if you could reply to my message as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, kazuya Nakagawa

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task response
For task response: answer all parts more fully. Tell more about your trip plans and say clearly which days you want to stay at her home.
task response
For task response: use a more warm and natural tone for a letter to your aunt. Add kind family words and a friendly reason to see her.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: some link words are not used well. Use simple links like and, but, so, because only when they fit the meaning.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: keep one main idea in each part. Put trip plans in one part, stay request in one part, and how you will help her in one part.
task response
For task response: you answered all three points in the task.
task response
For task response: you gave clear help you can give back, like cooking and walking the dogs.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: you used paragraphs, and this helps the reader follow your ideas.
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