You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: •explain which course you are interested in •say what you know about the university • explain why you should receive the scholarship
I hope you are doing well. It was nice to hear
about
you. I understand that it can be difficult to join a new community.
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from
Firstly
, in my experience at school, I was quite talkative and joined groups to practice speaking. If they didn't invite me, I would still make an effort to participate. You should have self-confidence and try to get involved in activities at your school. Also
, consider inviting them to have lunch together. When you first meet students, it's best to be quiet and not ask too many personal questions, as people generally don't like overly curious individuals.
Additionally
, if you find someone who doesn't understand the lesson, it's a good idea to help them. This
way, you can make a new friend. You should also
volunteer in social activities.
I hope you make many fun friends and find happiness. It has been a long time since I've seen you!
Best regards,Submitted by osama.mezal7 on
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task achievement
The letter lacks specific information regarding the course of interest, details about the university, and reasoning for receiving the scholarship.
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing the content more clearly by separating ideas into distinct paragraphs, ensuring each paragraph covers a single point more effectively.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate, friendly, and engaging, which suits the nature of the task.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-crafted and appropriate for the letter's purpose, adding to the coherence and cohesiveness of the text.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.