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The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs illustrate how Chinese people consumed
food
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 from 1985 to 2010.
Overall
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,
Fish
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 has become the
most
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apply
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favorite
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favourite
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food
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 consumed by Chinese people throughout the period. Opposite to
fish
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, the amount of
salt
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 consumption in China showed a significant fall over 25 years.
On the other hand
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,
meat
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 showed a nearly stable amount until the end of the period. In the first period,
fish
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 and
salt
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 stood as the highest
food
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 consumed in China with the amount of 600
grams
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 and 500
grams
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, respectively.
Although
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salt
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 became the most-eaten
food
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 in 1985, there was a sharp drop in 2010, with only 200
grams
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 of
salt
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 consumed that year.
However
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,
fish
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 consumption remains a high number and keep showed a gradual rise.
In contrast
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 with
fish
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 and
salt
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,
meat
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 became the least
favorite
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favourite
show examples
food
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 in China. In 1985 only 100
grams
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 of
meat
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 were consumed,
furthermore
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, there was only a slight difference for a quarter of the century,
meat
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 consumption increased by 50
grams
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, fish, salt, meat, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Food consumption trends
  • Per capita
  • Staple foods
  • Diet diversification
  • Protein-rich meals
  • Economic development
  • Stable or declining trend
  • Nutritional transition
  • Dietary shifts
  • Global averages
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