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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Speaking a second
language
 can be difficult for any person. Living in another country, and speaking a foreign
language
 can cause not only social
problems
 but
also
 practical
problems
.
This
 preference stems from various topics
such
 as communication and study. I firmly agree with
this
 statement, and
this
 essay will demonstrate them in support of my viewpoint. A remarkable reason for
this
 trend is that communication. Those
people
 living in foreign countries for jobs or work might be familiar with the situation. Without knowing the basic level of a second
language
, they could not handle well their client. A good level of proficiency in a certain
language
 can help to get a good salary
as well as
 communicate with colleagues.
For example
, a number of
people
 lose their promotion when they do not have enough skills how to communicate or deal with clients.
Additionally
, speaking in another
language
language
 can cause stress on a practical problem. In foreign countries, if
people
 struggle to talk, they can face social
problems
such
 as buying commodities, talking with neighbours, and studying in universities, especially when the teacher gives lectures on certain modules would be worse for them.
However
, there are some alternative processions provided by technology,
such
 as Translator, Duolingo, and TOEFL. I think they are not helpful and they do not keep all the time in their hands. Sometimes it is puzzling to use and have so many issues which cannot be tolerated.
To conclude
, without having proper skills in foreign languages they can create frustration sense when they want to speak. I believe,
although
Correct word choice
that although
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 they have fluency in certain languages where they live, they face
problems
 when talking with a native
people
 and it can be irritating for them.
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task achievement
Enhance the support for your main points with more specific examples and evidence from real-life situations.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear logical flow of ideas across the entire essay. This can include using a variety of linking words and phrases to show relationships between ideas and sections.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that frame the discussion well.
task achievement
You address both social and practical problems related to speaking a foreign language, which is relevant to the task prompt.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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