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Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss bot sides and give your opinion.

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There is an issue about whether a university
degree
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 or
skills
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 and
experience
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 are more important for getting a good
job
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. Both sides have strong points, and the answer may depend on the
job
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 we are looking for. On one side, having a university
degree
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 is seen as essential for many careers
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 jobs in medicine, law, and engineering often require a
degree
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. Employers in these fields expect candidates to have the necessary knowledge and training that comes with a
degree
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. A
degree
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also
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 shows that a person can commit to and complete a long-term goal, which is important for many employers. On the other side, some people believe that
skills
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 and
experience
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 are more valuable. In some areas like technology, arts, and trades,
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practical
skills
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experience
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 can sometimes be more useful than a
degree
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.
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, a software developer with years of
experience
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 and a strong portfolio may be more attractive to employers than someone with a
degree
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 but no real-world
experience
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.
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, today in
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 world, it’s important to keep
skills
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 up to date, and
experience
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 can help with that. In my opinion,
while
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 a
degree
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 is important for some jobs,
skills
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 and
experience
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 are
also
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 very important, that can help you succeed even if you don’t have a
degree
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. So, I think the best approach is to have both education and practical
experience
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, depending on the
job
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 you want. In conclusion, whether a
degree
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 or
skills
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 and
experience
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 are more important depends on the
job
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. Some careers need formal education,
while
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 others value practical
skills
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. Both are important and can help you find success in the 
job
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 market.

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To achieve a higher score, try to use more varied and sophisticated vocabulary. Including more complex sentence structures can also improve the overall quality of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the introduction by clearly restating the question or presenting the main argument more effectively. This will set a stronger foundation for your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured, with clear paragraphs that separate different ideas and arguments effectively.
task achievement
You have successfully provided both sides of the argument and included your own opinion, making the essay well-rounded.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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