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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years.
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The bar chart shows the
number
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 of
films
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 produced by five different nations over three consecutive years
in
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from
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 2007 to 2009.
Overall
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, it is clearly observed that
country
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 A produced the most,
whereas
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 that of
other
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the other
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 three countries C, D and E were relatively low.
However
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, it is
intersting
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interesting
 to note that the
number
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films
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of films
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 made
from
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in
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country
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 E
were
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was
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 relatively the same throughout the given time frame.
To begin
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 with, a closer look at the chart can
be seen
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show
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 that
while
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 trend of
number
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 of
films
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 produced in
country
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 A underwent a downward trend, that of in
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country
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countries
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 B and C were on the rise even if there had fewer media. In comparison between
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country
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countries
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 A and B, it is noticeable that both
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country
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countries
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 maintain the same
number
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 of
films
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 during the first two years at roughly 80 and 50, respectively. In 2009,
while
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country
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 A dropped to just over 75, that of
country
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 B
leveled
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levelled
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 off to roughly 70
films
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.
Moreover
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,
films
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 produced in
country
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 D
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 with
slight
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a slight
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dropped
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drop
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 in 2008 before
bounce
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bouncing
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 back to the same figure at roughly 20
films
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.
Hence
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,
country
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 E remained constant at 10
films
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, films, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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