The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph illustrates the
number
of annual
visitors
, in millions, to three museums - the MET in New York, the Edo in Tokyo, and The National
Museum
in China- over a 6-year
of
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period, starting from 2000.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that the national
museum
experienced an upward trend.
Additionally
, the MET
museum
saw an increase in the
number
of
visitors
with a fluctuation
whereas
the Edo
museum
in China witnessed a reduction of their annual
visitors
at the end
of
time
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the time
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span. In 2000, the
national
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National Museum
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museum
in USA, New York had the lowest
number
of sightseers, which was just above 6
million
, and
then
there was a gradual rise to 11
million
in 2003,
remained
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and remained
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stable in the following year.
Then
, it experienced a sharp increase
by
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of
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4
million
from 11
million
to 15
million
in 2005, which was
highest
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the highest
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throughout the period. Regarding the MET in New York, it started at 12
million
in 2000, witnessing a sharp decline to 6
million
in 2001, and remained stable in the next year before a rapid increase to just above 14
million
.
However
, Edo
museum
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museums
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in Japan saw a downward trend starting at around 13
million
in 2000, remaining stable in 2001, and dropping to around 9
million
in 2002.
Furthermore
, the figure increased to 10
million
in 2005, which was
lowest
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the lowest
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number
of
visitors
among these three museums in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museum, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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