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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided chart illustrates the results of a survey which took place in five different cities in Australia and asked respondents about their drinking habits over the past 4 weeks.
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, it can be seen that in all cities the most popular activity was going to a cafe since almost everywhere its rate exceeded the 50% mark with Melbourne having the largest figure of almost 65%.
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, going for a coffee was an insanely unpopular trend
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 statistics, as each city was not able to surpass 50%.
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, despite the major fluctuation in the 'fresh coffee' and 'going to a cafe' categories, buying instant coffee was the only activity that tended to maintain its original value and maintained almost the same original level compared to others.
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, in Sydney and Melbourne, it was just above 45%,
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 Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart have reached or exceeded a 50% rate with Hobart taking first place.
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, the above-mentioned 'cafe-goers' category was the least widespread. Sydney and Melbourne were just above 40%, Hobart was able to overtake the 35% rate, but Adelaide and Brisbane demonstrated the poorest results possible with approximately 33% each.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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