The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014.

The graph gives a breakdown of the percentages of monthly changes in the price of copper, nickel and zinc metal in 2014.
Overall
, nickel experienced a sharp decrease,
while
the changes in copper metal were a minimal rise and zinc metal witnessed a negligible fall. In the first month (January), nickel had the highest price at 6% and it had experienced a sharp decline at -3% by June. The figure saw an increase of 2% in the next month,
then
it had some fluctuation, reaching 1% by the end of
this
year. In January, the price of zinc metal was 1 %,
then
it rose noticeably to 3%. The figure was followed by a sharp decrease -1% by July,
while
the rate had experienced some changes, reaching 2% in December. Copper experienced 1% in January. The figure had decreased below 1% two months later
while
it had fluctuated
by
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the
last
month and
finally
, it rose above 1%.
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