The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014.

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The graph gives a breakdown of the percentages of monthly changes in the price of copper, nickel and zinc metal in 2014.

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, nickel experienced a sharp decrease,

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the changes in copper metal were a minimal rise and zinc metal witnessed a negligible fall. In the first month (January), nickel had the highest price at 6% and it had experienced a sharp decline at -3% by June. The figure saw an increase of 2% in the next month,

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it had some fluctuation, reaching 1% by the end of

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year. In January, the price of zinc metal was 1 %,

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it rose noticeably to 3%. The figure was followed by a sharp decrease -1% by July,

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the rate had experienced some changes, reaching 2% in December. Copper experienced 1% in January. The figure had decreased below 1% two months later

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it had fluctuated

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month and

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, it rose above 1%.

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014.

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work. Schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extend do you agree?