The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014.

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The graph gives a breakdown of the percentages of monthly changes in the price of copper, nickel and zinc metal in 2014.

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, nickel experienced a sharp decrease,

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the changes in copper metal were a minimal rise and zinc metal witnessed a negligible fall. In the first month (January), nickel had the highest price at 6% and it had experienced a sharp decline at -3% by June. The figure saw an increase of 2% in the next month,

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it had some fluctuation, reaching 1% by the end of

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year. In January, the price of zinc metal was 1 %,

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it rose noticeably to 3%. The figure was followed by a sharp decrease -1% by July,

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the rate had experienced some changes, reaching 2% in December. Copper experienced 1% in January. The figure had decreased below 1% two months later

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it had fluctuated

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month and

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, it rose above 1%.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

158 words

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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014.

More and more people no longer read newspaper. They get news about the world through the Internet. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?

Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?

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