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You are enrolled in a study abroad course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider, and there is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter: •Introduce yourself and describe the problem •Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting •Ask the provider to solve the problem Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Gazeley

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Dear Mr. Gazeley, I hope
this
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 message finds you well. My name is Trang Dao, and I am currently enrolled in the study abroad course in Canada, scheduled
to begin
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 on 6th January. I am writing to bring to your attention a significant issue with my accommodation that needs to be resolved. Upon my arrival, I discovered that the accommodation provided
is
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 not what was
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 described to me. I was assured of a furnished one-bedroom apartment with a kitchen and easy access to public transport.
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, I have been placed in a studio that lacks basic amenities, including a functional kitchen and proper heating.
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 situation is not only uncomfortable but
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 not conducive to my study and living needs during my time here. I kindly request that the course provider take immediate action to rectify
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 problem. Ideally, I would appreciate being relocated to an accommodation that meets the original expectations outlined in the course information. Thank you for your attention to
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 matter. I look forward to your prompt response. Sincerely, Trang Dao
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coherence and cohesion
To achieve the highest band, further divide paragraphs for more specific focus on each issue, such as separating the description of the current accommodation from the expectations.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the urgency or personal impact of the situation to fully maximize the response to the task.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear and respectful greeting and closing, maintaining a professional tone throughout.
task achievement
The issue with the current accommodation is clearly described and compared to the expected arrangement.
task achievement
The request for action is presented clearly, outlining the desired resolution effectively.
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