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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart provides key information about the
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size
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,
birth
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rate
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 and
death
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rate
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. The units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph the fact that
population
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size
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 had a significant increase from 1800 to year 2000.
In addition
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, in 1900 the
birth
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rate
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 and
population
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size
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 were the same
rate
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whereas
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, in 1950 the
population
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size
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 showed a considerable increase and the
birth
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size
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 dropped from 30 to less than 25.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1700, the
birth
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rate
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 had the highest
rate
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 30 million and the
death
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rate
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 was between
population
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size
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 and
birth
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rate
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 less than 30 and bigger than 10 in 1750
population
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size
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 increased and the
birth
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 and
death
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 rates remained. In terms, in 1900 the highest
rate
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 was a
population
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size
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 bigger than 40 million and the smallest
rate
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 was in the
death
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rate
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 and the
birth
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rate
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 started to decrease, in 1950
population
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size
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 and the
birth
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rate
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 increased

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, size, birth, rate, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending
  • expenditure
  • investments
  • renewable energy
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • growth rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data representation
  • research funding
  • energy sources
  • historical trends
  • country comparison
  • significant changes
  • period under review
  • increase/decrease
  • economic implications
  • environmental impact
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