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Some people prefer to live alone. Others enjoy sharing a house with family or friends. Do the advantages of living with others outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days some individuals love to live separately, but loved ones always take care and support them. It
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 works as a stress Buster.
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, people lose their private space, if they join their families.
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 the main con. The advantages are far higher than the disadvantages. I will discuss
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 matter in forthcoming paragraphs. There are many pros, spending time with family members is crucial, as they always support each other in every situation. They take care of them, and if they have any problem
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 they find a possible solution
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 so that they live stress-free.
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 at home, every person knows what is happening, if they feel anything wrong with their home mates that they are not well physically, need anything urgently or
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 they take action and help them, by solving their problems, which prove beneficial for their mental health and well-being,
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, living in a group is work as a good luck which leads a successful person. The main drawback is, nowadays everyone wants a private life so that no one can disturb them and they do what they want.
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, if the masses live in a group,
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 they lose their privacy which makes them arrogant. To exemplify, 70% of humans want to survive alone because they noticed in families they lost their private lives, as they had to share things with others, which they disliked.
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, most individuals leave their homes and start to live in another place.
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 living alone has a demerit because youngsters want privacy, there are a lot of merits to living in a family
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 as having love, care and support that will not be neglected. If families start to live within boundaries and give privacy to everyone, it will be a solution to
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 demerit.

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task achievement
Ensure to balance the arguments for both sides a bit more evenly to fully address the task.
coherence cohesion
Organize ideas more effectively to create a more coherent flow from one point to the other.
coherence cohesion
You presented an introduction and a conclusion, framing the discussion well.
task achievement
You have provided examples to support your points, helping to illustrate the arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional support
  • psychological support
  • distribution of household chores
  • manageable daily life
  • economical living
  • shared expenses
  • improved social skills
  • better relationships
  • communication and cooperation
  • conflicts or disagreements
  • lack of privacy
  • sense of security and safety
  • personal space
  • compromises
  • lifestyle choices
  • family-like environment
  • biological family
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