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The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The chart shows the average
GPD
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 growth per decade for three different types of
countries
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 over a period of 40 years. In the 1960s the figures for the wealthy
countries
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 were by far the highest at close to five per
cent
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 per annum.
This
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 figure is double that of the non-global
countries
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 and three times that of the
countries
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 operating on a global level.
However
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, by the 1970s
this
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 trend had changed considerably; the globalisers doubled their annual
GPD
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 over
this
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 period and there was
also
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 an increase in
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GPD
Correct article usage
the GPD
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 of the non-global
countries
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,
while
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 the wealthy
countries
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 fell to three per
cent
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 per year. In the 1980s and
90s
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'90s
, as technology made globalisation even easier, the downward trend for the wealthy
countries
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 continued falling to a low of two per
cent
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at the end
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 of
this
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 period. For the
countries
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who
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that
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 resisted using a global approach to business, the
GPD
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 fell sharply to just under one per
cent
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 in the 1980s and rose only slightly in the 1990s to 1.5 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, for the
countries
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 that embraced globalisation, the
GPD
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 figures rose significantly throughout
this
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 time, and by the 1990s had more than matched the
GPD
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 figures for the wealthy
countries
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 of the 1960s.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gpd, countries, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • economic growth
  • global approach to business
  • non-global countries
  • wealthy countries
  • trend
  • growth rate
  • domestic products
  • globalization
  • international trade
  • economic maturity
  • stable economy
  • consistently
  • key factors
  • comparison
  • benefits
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