Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sports, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sport plays a pivotal role in everyone’s life. Some parts of
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people think that fitness is more important to be successful in sports,
while
others think mental stamina is necessary for the best results in sports. I would like to discuss both views and give my opinion
at the end
of the essay. First of all, physical stamina is important for success in the sport because, in some games,
players
have to be fast and quick on the ground. If a player is fully fit, they can give maximum effort
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the ground.
For example
, in football, during some
matches
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players
have to run continuously, so it is easy if the player is fully fit.
Furthermore
,
fitness
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of
players
reduces the chance of injuries. For the above reasons, people believe that fitness is necessary.
On the other hand
, mental health plays a big role in sports because, in games,
players
need to
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decisions in high-pressure situations. At that time, calmness of mind plays a vital role.
For example
, India won the 2011 Cricket World Cup in a pressure situation
due to
players
’ mental
strength
. Another reason is that mental stability helps
players
to overcome injuries and stay motivated during playtime.
Moreover
, mental stability
help
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players
to stay grounded after becoming
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famous in short periods.
This
is why people believe that mental
strength
is necessary. In conclusion, physical
strength
helps
players
to become fast and agile, and mental
strength
supports staying calm during pressure situations. So,
according to
my opinion,
players
need to develop both strengths to become successful in the game.
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Include more specific examples or anecdotes to support your points, particularly in the sections discussing physical strength and mental strength.
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The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines the structure of the essay.
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The essay provides a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and presents a clear opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical strength
  • endurance
  • athlete
  • performance
  • injury prevention
  • mental strength
  • pressure
  • focus
  • high-stakes situations
  • mental game
  • resilience
  • setbacks
  • recover
  • motivated
  • foundation
  • longevity
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