The diagram below shows how instant noddles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noddles are manufactured.
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The diagram illustrates
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of making instant
noodles
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.
Overall
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, there are 8 steps in making
noodles
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, beginning with the storage silos and ending with the labelling
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.
To begin
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, the first
stage
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of making
noodles
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is transporting flour from storage.
Following
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this
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, water and oil are added to the flour and put in a mixer to make a liquid . A roller assists in
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process. In the next
stage
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, all
this
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liquid goes to the
dough
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sheets to transform into another mixture.
Following
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this
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, the sheet with liquid goes to
dough
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strips in order to make another form of
this
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liquid.
Then
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, all
this
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liquid is put into the
noodles
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discs and
then
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all discs are put into the cooker to dry the
dough
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. The next
stage
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is adding vegetables and spices to the cup with
dough
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.
Finally
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, the
last
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stage
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is labelling and sealing all
noodles
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in cups and delivering them to their destination.
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