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Writing Samples
Band 6

Write a letter for a membership or participation in an event

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Dear Sir, I am writing formally request to express my keen interest in
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 in the “National Science Exhibition” organized by your esteemed organization. It has been a privilege to be a member
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volunteers
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 work in several educational institutes
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 year with your supportive team. Recently, I came to know about
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 advanced research event from your official website.
Due to
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 my prior knowledge in awareness work, I believe I am capable
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with
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different age groups in
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learning process of unique biology concepts.
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, I proposed diverse models that demonstrate a brief understanding of concepts like photosynthesis, ecological chains, cell structures and magnetic steps. I really appreciate
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 you
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 me a chance to express my deep insights
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 science to the students in
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 reliable workshop.
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,
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 year
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 decided to bring
latest
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 concept of using renewable energy in daily activities. Please let me know about the
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 registrations and documentation process for next steps. I would appreciate any guidance or information about the required
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 of the project and I adhere to them. I look forward
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 your positive response. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Sarab

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter for better coherence.
Task Achievement
Try to maintain a consistent writing tone throughout the letter to enhance readability and professionalism.
Task Achievement
The letter successfully conveys a strong interest and highlights previous relevant experience, which aligns well with the task requirements.
Coherence & Cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the writer's enthusiasm and eagerness for the opportunity, ending on a positive note.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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