You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to express my disappointment with the changing room in the sports centre. I bought a membership online from your website on 27 November 2024. A changing room, Number 2 in the sports centre has not been big enough as expected from day first. The primary issue I faced during my visits there were no proper security lockers despite being advertised as fully secured. There is no proper ventilation system and falls suffocate. There should be two rooms for changing to avoid congestion issues.

Additionally

, I had spent $100 on membership fees and getting

this

type of facilities not justified. please let me know how you would like to resolve

this

problem without any future issues. Yours faithfully, Alex

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task achievement

The letter presents the problem effectively but could benefit from additional specific examples or details regarding the issues faced in the changing rooms to further clarify the situation.

coherence cohesion

Consider rephrasing some sentences for better grammar and clarity. For example, "falls suffocate" is unclear, probably referring to walls or atmosphere.

task achievement

The letter outlines the main concerns clearly and addresses the purpose of communication to the manager.

coherence cohesion

The use of a formal greeting and closing is appropriate for this type of letter.

task achievement

The letter maintains a formal and polite tone throughout, suitable for communicating with a manager.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

125 words

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You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

Word Count

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

If countries are serious about solving traffic problems, they should tax private cars very heavily and use the money to provide free or very cheap rail travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more businesses, as well as individuals, are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss both views and give your opinion.