The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

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The current maps illustrate a particular industrial area of Norbiton and how it is planned to be developed in the future. At

the

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first glance, it is comprehended that the site will turn

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into

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a more residential area and significantly

flourished

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flourish

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with

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more facilities

such

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as medical and educational

centers

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centres

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Furthermore

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, some green farmlands will be replaced by new

road

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constructions. On the eastern side of the

map

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, the factories among both sides of the east

road

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will be converted

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into

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housing areas

along with

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a spacious playground and a school

at the end

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of the

road

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Also

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beside

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besides

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various

habitants

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habitats

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, several shops and a medical

center

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centre

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will be built around the central main square. On the top of the

map

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, a few farmlands will be demolished to return to residential areas which will be interconnected to the central part of the region through a bridge over the northern river.

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the main

road

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map

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of the region will not considerably change, a new street will be constructed at the western side of the central square among the new housing areas

along with

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a new smaller square on the southern part of the

map

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, map with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

194 words

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