The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
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The current maps illustrate a particular industrial area of Norbiton and how it is planned to be developed in the future. At
the
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first glance, it is comprehended that the site will turn
to
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a more residential area and significantly
flourished
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by
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more facilities
such
as medical and educational
centers
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.
Furthermore
, some green farmlands will be replaced by new
road
constructions. On the eastern side of the
map
, the factories among both sides of the east
road
will be converted
to
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housing areas
along with
a spacious playground and a school
at the end
of the
road
.
Also
,
beside
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various
habitants
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, several shops and a medical
center
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will be built around the central main square. On the top of the
map
, a few farmlands will be demolished to return to residential areas which will be interconnected to the central part of the region through a bridge over the northern river.
Although
the main
road
map
of the region will not considerably change, a new street will be constructed at the western side of the central square among the new housing areas
along with
a new smaller square on the southern part of the
map
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, map with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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