The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart

shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people

think the costs of adult education should be shared.

Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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There are two
grpahs
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graphs
give information about
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result of a questionnaire
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education for adults. The
first
one illustrates a distribution as a reason why they study, and the
second
one describes how
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of expenditure of each
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should be used together by people.
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, it is noticeable that
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adults prefer
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interest and acquiring qualifications through
educating
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and there is the most
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factor among individuals by sharing the prices. In
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the detail
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of the
first
graph, the figure for interest in subject accounts for 40%, recording the
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largest one compared to other parts. The
second
biggest data is to gain qualifications, that there
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little difference between the
first
and the
second
. Meanwhile, the percentage of people who decide to study for
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for
current
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job stands at 22, it decreased
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twofold by comparing with the
first
biggest proportion. Regarding the
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remaining
information, there is the largest
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proportion
related to 40
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of people as individuals. the portion of employers shows
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35%, being the
second
greatest, which is about
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% difference
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an individual. The figure for taxpayers
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the statistical data, by recording 25%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, second with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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