Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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In
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era of technology, there is
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an impact on household chores; there are many
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that help
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of cleaning manually. I believe that the benefits do outweigh the drawbacks. On the positive side, I believe that using technology to clean every part of the house is beneficial. First and foremost, it can save more energy for housework activities.
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, an automatic sweeper cleans floors with minimal manual intervention, so people can carry out
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as cooking.
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, they finish all house chores with less energy.
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, individuals
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not necessarily supposed to spare specific time for domestic duties. On the weekend,
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, people usually spend all day
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cleaning and not having time for outdoor activities.
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, with electronic devices, cleaning and tidying still happen and people can go out to enjoy their leisure. In
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case, automatic
machines
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helpful.
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, technological advancement occurs to replace hands to finish domestic duties, bringing negative sides too.
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, electronic
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have high electricity requirements. To exemplify, washing
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require 1800s watts for each operation,
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the average electric capacity of a
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is 2200 watts.
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means only 400 watts remain, which can be utilized only for lamps.
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, each house needs more space or rooms to save these devices.
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, their place will look cramped if owners cannot organise it well. In conclusion, using
machines
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for daily tasks has merits and demerits.
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, I believe that we gain more beneficial impact rather than detrimental effects from
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movement.
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  • Displacement
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