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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise, and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

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To start with, there are different ways to stay healthy
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life and
people
 are trying to follow any of them. Usually, we get used to one or two techniques that we continue doing.
However
, the situation in our country is different
becuase
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because
 of the war. Some
things
 that worked previously may be not effective now.
People
 need to hide in shelters, they do not sleep at
nights
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,
they
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 are worried about bombing, relatives, loved ones, and others.
Therefore
, they are not calm and mental
helath
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health
 is at risk. It influences
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physical
health
.
That is
 why, you may have a balanced diet,
get
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and get
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 a lot of exercise but at the same time have
obecity
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obesity
 or
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frequent
headache
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headaches
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.
For instance
, I visit doctors each month and still, they cannot diagnose why I
obtain
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 new kilograms with
the
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 healthy diet and regular
sport
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sports
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 exercises. Our body builds its own resistance to stress. To tell the truth, I think that
people
 should pay more attention to their mental
health
 which will be more beneficial to the
overall
 state.
People
 should relax, take vacations or at least the days off. We should allow ourselves to be lazy and do nothing
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 some period of time. No one will return our healthy cells back.
Besides
, everyone should accept the fact that we are different and may need
varios
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various
 methods to stay healthy. Someone may enjoy meditation and pilates. Others would love going to the park and just walking
on
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 the fresh air. Some
people
 go to the gym or have active
hobbys
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hobbies
hobby
.
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 is crucial to choose the
things
 that make you happy first. In conclusion, a healthy person is
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one
that
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who
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 cares about
the
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mental
health
 and does the
things
 that loves and enjoys.
The
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 good diet and exercise are additional
things
 that can
also
 contribute to
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health
 if chosen wisely.
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