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The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.
There are 3 major subway systems in the European cities , which are London Underground , Paris
Metro
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 ,
Moscow
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and Moscow
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Metro
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. Londen Underground subway system has a total
track
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 length
408
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of 408
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km , and the
number
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 of
stations
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 it contains 275. And
a
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the
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 daily
number
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 of
passengers
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 is 3
million
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.
Moreover
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,
Paris
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the Paris
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Metro
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receivese
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receives
received
a
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apply
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4.5
million
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passengers
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everyday
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every day
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, and it
consist
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consists
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 of 300
stations
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 with
total
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a total
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track
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lenght
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length
214
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of 214
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km . On
other
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the other
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 hand , Moscow
Metro
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 has 182
stations
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 , which can be
defecult
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difficult
 for
a
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the
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 huge
number
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 of daily
passengers
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count
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counting
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 for 6.5
million
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 , and have a
track
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 length
300
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of 300
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km. These
stations
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 are different from each other London Underground has the longest
track
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 in both underground and on surface and it is 408km. The highest daily
number
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 of
passengers
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 is in
Moscow
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the Moscow
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Metro
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 is 6.5
million
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. Paris
Metro
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 has a lot of
stations
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 and
they
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there
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 are 300
stations
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, track, km, number, stations, passengers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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