The table and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 on one area of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and chart show how it was distributed.

The table and chart below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 on one area of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and chart show how it was distributed.
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The charts and table above display the
budget
of the police in a specific area of
britain
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between the
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2017 and 2018, in the following paragraphs we will analyze them. In the year 2017, the sum of
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all
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the
budget
was 304,7
millions
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almost 60% of it came from
national
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government and 30% came from taxes, grants and various sources.
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of the
budget
was used to pay salaries, and the rest served to
maintien
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maintain
buildings and transportation,
while
only 8% was utilized
to
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technology.
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with
the
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2017, the
budget
increase
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in the following year by 14
millions
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, with the extra money coming mainly from taxes; but the biggest contributor was still the national government. And despite the additional
budget
, the salaries decreased to represent only 69% of the total expenses, in favour of allocating more funds to technology.
While
the buildings and transportation kept the same range of funds.
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