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Some people think that the media (newspapers ) have the right to publish details of people's private lives, while other think it should be controlled. discuss both views.

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In the current era, it is widely acknowledged by a high number of
people
 that social
media
 allows publishing
others
' lives in some detail,
while
others
 strongly believe that it needs controlling. Since publishing individuals' lives can not be considered as a
right
, I support the second side. In the following paragraphs, both sides will be discussed.
To begin
 with, it is considerable to note that controlling social
media
 to not publish privacy from
others
 is a necessity in the current world. Since everyone tends to have privacy not shared with society, it can be controlled by either governments or authorities. If a magazine publishes everything in detail,
people
 can not rely on their other activities in order to some loyers.
Further
, some folks are not interested in putting any of their photos and videos on the
media
 to maintain specific
life
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 themselves. When newspapers control their texts and publishing, the population can feel relaxed.
On the other hand
, spreading
details
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 of
others
 may be considered a
right
 of the
media
, but it is worth mentioning that it leads to numerous difficulties in society. Most
community
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 do not enjoy watching someone else in the
media
 because of being conscious. In
this
 way, they break down the good relationship and try to spoil communication.
In addition
,
although
 a few groups of
people
 can afford to buy wealthy things,
others
 have a serious problem doing that.
Hence
, rich
people
 think of a
right
 to publish any details.
To conclude
, in spite of the fact that many
people
 have the
right
 to
the
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magazines to publish a great deal of information,
others
 strongly believe that it must be controlled.
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