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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
These maps illustrate
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital in two different years including 2007 and 2010.
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, in the period of three years, starting from 2007, the
road
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 access to the hospital had many developments in terms of the bus station and car park. In 2010 the
road
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 had some extensions,
two
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and two
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 roundabouts
added
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were added
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 to the
road
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. One of them
added
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was added
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 on the south
side
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 of Hospital
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road
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Road
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 where it connected to
City
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road
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Road
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 and the other one
added
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was added
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 to the south
side
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 of the
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city hospital
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City Hospital
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, where the Ring
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road
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Road
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 connected to Hospital Rd.
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, a public car park which had not been there in 2007
constructed
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was constructed
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 in 2010 next to the
city
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 hospital on the east
side
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. In 2007 there
had been
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were
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 many bus stops on Hospital Rd
while
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 in 2010 they were removed and turned to a bus station on the west
side
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 of the
road
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 which had access from both roundabouts. There
furthermore
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 had been a car park on the east
side
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 of Hospital Rd which was designed for staff and
public
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the public
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,
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However
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However,
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 in
2010
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2010,
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 its use changed for only staff's usage.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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