The graph shows the number of people taking part of 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

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The line chart provides statistics about the number of

indivdual

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individual

individuals

doing different types of sports in

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apply

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specific areas which are badminton, basketball, tennis, and

rugby

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throughout the intervals of 1985 to 2005.

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while

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the number of

people

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playing badminton, basketball, and tennis sports rose, the

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rugby's

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rugby

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players

figure

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decreased

rapialy

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rapidly

. As shown in the graph, the

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number of badminton's

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badminton's

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badminton

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players number started at 51person in 1985 followed by a slight decrease to 49 in 1990.

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, it increased to 50 in 1995 before Levelling off in the following years. Regarding basketball, the

figure

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, of

people

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stood at 98 in 1985.

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experienced a gradual increase to 99 in 2000, but it fell to 98 in 2005. Turning to tennis, In 1985, only there were 150 players. It saw a substantial growth to 250 in 2005.

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, the count of

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playing

rugby

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witnessed a significant rise over the period. In 1985, 249

people

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Played

rugby

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however

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, the

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plummeted to 50 in 2005

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

164 words

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