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The char below shows that number of households in the USA by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

#char #households #usa #income
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The bar graph provides the
number
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 of households in the US based on their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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, it shows an upward trend in the
number
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 of
salary
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salaries
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 in all of the
household
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households
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 throughout the
years
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, with a variety of
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number
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numbers
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 in each year. More than 100,000
USD
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become
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became
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 the common
number
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 in 2007 with nearly 30
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millions
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million
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people
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have
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having
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 the same amount of annual salary. The
number
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 of
people
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then
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 slightly
decrease
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decreased
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 in 2011 before it
climb
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climbed
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 to over 30
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millions
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million
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people
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 as shows the highest in 2015. The
number
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 between 25,000 to 49,000
USD
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 always
hold
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held
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 the second place over the
years
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, with over 25
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millions
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million
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people
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 in 2007,
then
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increase
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increasing
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 to around 30
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millions
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million
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 before it fell slightly in 2015.
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, the
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people
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number of people
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 who have an annual salary
less
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of less
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 than 25,000
USD
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increase
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increases
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 throughout the
years
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. Starting from 25
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millions
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million
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people
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 in 2007,
then
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rise
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rising
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 to almost 30
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millions
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million
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 before it
decline
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declined
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 to around 27
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millions
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million
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 in 2015.
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, the annual income
for
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of
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 50,000-74,999
USD
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 and 75,000-99,000
USD
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 remained stable over the
years
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. With around 20
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millions
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million
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people
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 for the first category and approximately 15
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millions
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million
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people
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 for the second one.
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