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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the provided diagram compares the popularity of Instagram's big influencers in a period of 3 years.
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, It is evident that Cristiano Ronald was the centre of attraction in 2021,
whereas
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 that position had been dominated by Selena Gomez 3 years before Looking
further
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 into the details , Selena Gomez is at the top of the list of people in 2018 with 130
million
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 followers .Cristiano Ronaldo is the scend with 110
million
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.
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 , Cristiano outraces Selena in 2021 by around 310,just under 220
million
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 respectively.
On the other hand
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, The Rock,Ariana Grande,and Kylie Jenner had approximately the same number
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million
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 in 2021. We can see a slight difference between the figures in 2018. Ariana was around 110, Kylie less than 100 and The Rock was the lower by 90
million
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • popularity
  • Instagram accounts
  • growth
  • decline
  • comparison
  • remained stable
  • significant change
  • new entries
  • exits
  • patterns
  • trends
  • noteworthy
  • notable
  • fluctuation
  • predominant
  • dominant
  • proliferation
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