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The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the government's spending on traditional and education between 1985 and 2005. The bar
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 displays the number of people who were involved in the
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 exhibition over two years.
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, it can be seen that in the pine
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, all types of
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 experiences dropped trends,
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 theater literature was increasing. The bar
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, in 2005, has more number of participants in every type of
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. Starting with the pine
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, music has the most figures compared to all proportions in 1995.
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, by 2005, it
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 moderately decreased.
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 by visual arts which
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 with
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 drop in 2005. Literature and theatre became considerable and shared a big portion in 2005. Moving to the bar
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, literature dominates the top-rank number of people who joined with 125,000 and 155,000 participants, respectively. Followed by, a theatre which in 2005 had more numbers than in 1995 at 15,000 people. Visual arts share close figures with approximately 50,000 participants. The smallest figure is music with namely 30,000 and 20,000 populations who were involved in these
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 events in 1995 and 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, art with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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