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The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the government's spending on traditional and education between 1985 and 2005. The bar
chart
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 displays the number of people who were involved in the
art
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 exhibition over two years.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in the pine
chart
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, all types of
art
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 experiences dropped trends,
while
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 theater literature was increasing. The bar
chart
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, in 2005, has more number of participants in every type of
art
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. Starting with the pine
chart
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, music has the most figures compared to all proportions in 1995.
However
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, by 2005, it
apply
Wrong verb form
applied

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb apply. Consider changing it.

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 moderately decreased.
This
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followed
Add a missing verb
was followed

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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 by visual arts which
confronted
Add a missing verb
was confronted

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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 with
significant
Add an article
a significant

The noun phrase significant drop seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 drop in 2005. Literature and theatre became considerable and shared a big portion in 2005. Moving to the bar
chart
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, literature dominates the top-rank number of people who joined with 125,000 and 155,000 participants, respectively. Followed by, a theatre which in 2005 had more numbers than in 1995 at 15,000 people. Visual arts share close figures with approximately 50,000 participants. The smallest figure is music with namely 30,000 and 20,000 populations who were involved in these
art
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 events in 1995 and 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, art with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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