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Band 3

The table in question details the salaries for secondary school teachers in 5 countries in 2009

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The given table depicts information about
income
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the income
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 of secondary/high school
teachers
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 in five countries in 2009. From an
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
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starting
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 base
salary
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 of
teachers
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 in Japan was on the lowest point,
while
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 In Luxemburg
teachers
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 were paid the highest wages. It
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long
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 time to reach the top
salary
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 in
Korea
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,
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 in Denmark it was less than
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.
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 with, the entry-level
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 in
Korea
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 was $28 000, just $2500 less than in
Korea
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 ($30 500).
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the
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contrast the income of
teachers
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 in Luxemburg was almost three times higher $80 000.
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, the average wages in Luxemburg were
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 rewarding and reached $112 000,
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 in Denmark and
Korea
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 they were $52 600 and $54000.
According to
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 ($84500) for
Korea
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 was 37 years, three years more than in Japan. Denmark and Australia provided more affordable conditions of 8 and 9 years to reach the top income.

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introduction
Work on providing a more comprehensive introduction that includes all key elements of the table. This will give a clear overview of what the essay will cover.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to develop more comprehensive ideas in the body paragraphs, making sure to cover all data points and possible comparisons comprehensively.
relevant specific examples
Include more specific examples and data points from the table to support your points more effectively. This will add more relevance and depth to your response.
logical structure
Your essay maintains a logical structure, presenting and comparing the salaries across the countries effectively.
supported main points
The main points about entry-level and maximum salary, as well as the time required to reach maximum salary, are clearly supported with data from the table.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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