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The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the data about six departments students studied in an Australian university in 2009. From an
overall
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 look, it is manifested that females in
English
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, Modern
Languages
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, and
History
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 courses were predominant,
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 the opposite was true in the case of the remaining departments.
In addition
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, those whose first language is not
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,
together with
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 those born outside Australia took up almost the total student population across all areas, except for modern
languages
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. Delving into
further
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 detail, it is evident that in terms of the rate of females enrolling,
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 courses accounted for the highest, at about 67%, followed by Modern
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 and
History
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 with 63% and 58%, in the given order.
Furthermore
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, non-
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 learners were the largest in Modern
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, constituting 41%.
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,
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,
along with
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 had a lower percentage for 16% and 10% respectively. In the middle lay Physics, Maths and Chemistry, holding a number of 32% to 38%. In the
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 section, regarding students born outside Australia, figures for Modern
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 were the highest, at 54%. Other fields reported a lower proportion, with
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 at the lowest, comprising just 18% of international students. There was a similar figure in the Physics, Math and Chemistry discipline, standing between 43% and 47%.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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