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Many countries are now using solar energy as their primary source of energy. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using solar energy.

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Numerous nations have started to rely on solar power as their main
energy
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 source.
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 there are some drawbacks associated with using
this
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 system, I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of utilizing solar
energy
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 may be the high initial costs of it. Solar panels are expensive.
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, the cost of their transportation and installation is very high.
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, most countries especially, third world countries are unable to buy these panels and apply
this
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energy
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. Another perceived negative is that solar
energy
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 is weather-dependent. Since solar panels save the sun's
energy
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, at night or during cloudy days, they cannot work effectively.
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,
this
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 system is not proper for the countries that are deprived of sufficient sunlight.
On the other hand
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, a primary advantage of using
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energy
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 is that sustainable and environmentally friendly. In recent years, employing fossil fuels has caused major environmental problems all over the world.
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, several species have become extinct, air pollution has been raised.
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,
peoples'
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 health has been threatened by these pollutions.
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, using the sun's
energy
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 in
this
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 system protects the environment and prevents damage to Earth and its atmosphere. A
further
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 benefit is lower
energy
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 bills.
Due to
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 the fact that solar
energy
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 is supplied by sunlight and it is renewable
energy
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,
this
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 is inexpensive to use over the long term. On balance, it is true that utilizing solar power would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
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, in my view, its positive effects in terms of sustainability and low
energy
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 bills
in
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 a long period override the disadvantages.
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Try to provide more specific examples to enhance the richness of your essay. Examples will make your points more relatable and credible.
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Consider elaborating more on how third world countries might address the issue of high initial solar panel costs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent transitions between sentences and paragraphs for seamless reading.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
The main advantages and disadvantages of solar energy are well-discussed and balanced.
task achievement
The essay addresses all parts of the prompt using clear and concise language.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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